Ivi-Jinn-File

●Information about the current version (English version):
-The current version was edited in Chinese before translation.
-The current version was edited based on the Mar 7th Chinese version (the original).
-Edited character count before translation: 32% (edited character count/total character count of edited version = 5098/16082); the title was not included.
-Edited character count did not include any suggestions I made for the Mar 7th version before it was posted.

Besides the suggestions I've made for the Chinese version (the original), the English version was edited in content, structure and wording a further step. The changes in contents are listed below.

●Deleted:
-Personalized AI "Dawn"
-Trifles in the second letter
-All side characters' names besides Dr. Thirteen

●Modified:
-Names (changed to Spark, Sperantia and Esperanza; CN branch user names were used in the original)
-The notion of family in Starship society
-People's reaction to couples like Custos and River
-Custos and River's love story
-People's attitude towards Earth culture
-The flower (changed to Bells-of-Ireland, a symbolism of luck)
-People's view about returning Earth
-Spark's speech
-Responses from Colonial Party
-The fight between Patria and River
-River's responses to the death of Patria
-Relationship between Custos and River in Part 6 (changed to sort of distant relationship)

●Added:
-Hardcopy book on Starships
-The book The Little Prince, and all contents about the rose
-Hume level in the first letter (to replace "Dawn" in the following paragraphs)
-Explanation of antimeme
-S suggested River to leave the letters
-The lengthened lines of stars in the third letter
-The young generation, especially students, criticized the Earth dream and Earth culture
-The Starship Culture program, and the conspiracy theory
-S cancelled River's access to the library, requested a transfer for River
-River shuffled off her responsibility, shifted the blame on to Spark
-River's guilty feeling
-Patria was being bullied in school
-Patria hated her name
-The conversation about Spark in Part 6
-People's attitude towards Colonial Party and colonial plans in the last part

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